That 8 Marker

[hollis]

As we discussed today - here's yon formula.



2 marks for commonality
The student should make reference to the commonality between either the extract and the rest of the text or the extract and another text. The commonality may be theme, narrative, use of personal experience, setting, imagery or any other key element



2 marks for discussion of extract in front of them
The student should quote or refer to a technique, idea, feature or any other relevant reference linked to the extract (1 mark)
The student should make an appropriate comment on these techniques, ideas, features or references (1 mark)



4 marks for discussion of another text
The student should quote or refer to a technique, idea, feature or any other relevant reference from the rest of the text or another text (1 mark)

The student should make an appropriate comment on these techniques, ideas, features or references (1 mark)

This should be done TWICE to gain four marks

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An exemplar -

A poem that is similar to “War Photographer” is “Originally.” In WP, the photographer feels that he does not belong in the warzone or at home, and in “Originally” the speaker does not feel like she belongs in her new home, even though her family is settled.
In WP, this is shown when it says
“From the aeroplane he stares impassively” – the word choice of “Impassively” has connotations of a lack of care, someone who does not feel anything. The photographer feels like he cannot connect with his home country of England.

In “Originally”, the speaker talks of feeling “a skelf of shame” – this metaphor, using a Scottish word for a splinter, shows that she is still feeling part of her Scottish ancestry in under her skin, like a splinter, and is unsure of where she belongs.

At the end of the poem, Duffy asks “Do I only think
I lost a river, culture, speech, sense of first space
and the right place?” The list of things she feels she has lost, which ends with a question, shows Duffy is now unsure as to where she finally belongs, whether that is in her birthplace, or her new home.

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And another -

Both Havisham and Valentine deal with obsessive love.
In Havisham, Ms. Havisham is still obsessing over the man who left her.
In Valentine, the speaker is obsessed with the person in front of them and wants to show how strong their love is.
In Havisham, this is shown when the speaker talks of “whole days / in bed cawing ‘Nooooo”
The use of the onomatopoeia in “cawing” shows how the obsessive love has caused her to become animalistic, and the word “whole” suggests the length of time she spends thinking about him.
In Valentine, this is shown when the speaker talks of the onion’s
“fierce kiss will stay on your lips,”
The metaphor of the long lasting taste of the onion to the speaker’s love suggests it is lingering and obsessive.
It is also shown when the speaker talks about the onion’s
“platinum loops shrink to a wedding band”
Showing the speaker is so obsessive, they metaphorically compare the rings to a wedding ring, in order to show how committed they are.